歷年高考英語(yǔ)滿(mǎn)分作文匯總，你想要的都在這里

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試題回顧

假定你是李華，你的新西蘭朋友Terry將去中國(guó)朋友家做客，發(fā)郵件向你詢(xún)問(wèn)有關(guān)習(xí)俗。請(qǐng)你回復(fù)郵件，內(nèi)容包括：
1. 到達(dá)時(shí)間；
2. 合適的禮物；
3. 餐桌禮儀。

注意：
1. 詞數(shù)100左右；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

 

思路點(diǎn)撥
本文是一篇電子郵件類(lèi)應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作。餐桌禮儀也是考生比較熟悉的話(huà)題。成文時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：
一、內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要齊全：

1．到達(dá)時(shí)間；2．合適的禮物；3．餐桌禮儀。
二、時(shí)態(tài)：
主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和將來(lái)時(shí)；
三、人稱(chēng)：
第二、三人稱(chēng)。
四、注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)母呒?jí)詞匯、短語(yǔ)或句型，以提高作文的水平；
五、適當(dāng)使用一些連接詞和插入語(yǔ)，使文章表達(dá)自然、流暢。
1. 瀏覽信息要點(diǎn)。
2. 三個(gè)任務(wù)點(diǎn)，第一段內(nèi)容：?jiǎn)柡驅(qū)Ψ?，馬上呈現(xiàn)對(duì)方所涉及的話(huà)題，拜訪(fǎng)中國(guó)家庭，做客時(shí)間的要求和忌諱! 第二段內(nèi)容：做客拜訪(fǎng)的合適禮物，可以適當(dāng)延展，初次拜訪(fǎng)，親密朋友之間拜訪(fǎng)，二次拜訪(fǎng)，家庭情況適合的禮物，通用的禮物等。第三段：table manners,可以描述兩三個(gè)通常的中國(guó)人的餐桌禮節(jié)和忌諱的地方，有鮮明特色之處，最后一句表達(dá)祝愿。
3. 時(shí)態(tài)，給對(duì)方的建議和說(shuō)明，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述風(fēng)俗禮儀這是客觀(guān)規(guī)律性的東西，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。
4. 頭腦風(fēng)暴短語(yǔ)、句型結(jié)構(gòu)，開(kāi)始打草稿。
5. 行文。
6. 檢查拼寫(xiě)和語(yǔ)法。

【滿(mǎn)分作文】
Dear Terry,
　　How are you doing? Learning that you are about to pay a visit to a Chinese friend and confused about the Chinese customs, I am writing to put forward some advice.
　　Firstly, I would 1ike to suggest that you arrive 5 to 10 minutes earlier, which is common in Chinese traditional culture. Secondly, if I were you I would bring some appropriate gifts with me, such as souvenirs from my own country. Besides, table manners are also what you should pay attention to. For example, you are not supposed to stick your chopsticks into your food. Instead, laying them on your dish is a smart choice.
　　If you have any other problems, please don’t hesitate to contact me.

 

 

【素材積累】

做客禮儀：
1. 預(yù)先約定一個(gè)時(shí)間以便對(duì)方事先作好安排。如果事先已經(jīng)約定好了時(shí)間，就應(yīng)遵守約定，準(zhǔn)時(shí)到達(dá)，如需提早十分鐘二十分鐘之內(nèi)可以接受，不要遲到，以免主人等候，也不要太早到，以免主人未作好準(zhǔn)備。這是一個(gè)基本禮節(jié)問(wèn)題。
 

2.如果有專(zhuān)屬地域文化特色的禮物是最好的。如果朋友家有長(zhǎng)輩，帶點(diǎn)煙酒和茶葉或一些老人家用的保健品等；如果朋友家有小孩，帶點(diǎn)兒童玩具或買(mǎi)箱牛奶，然后加點(diǎn)茶葉啥的；不要送鐘、梨、傘等這些東西，被認(rèn)為不吉祥。

 

3.主人會(huì)請(qǐng)客人入座上席，再請(qǐng)長(zhǎng)輩入座客人旁。入座的時(shí)侯要從椅子的左邊進(jìn)入。在中餐結(jié)束時(shí)，筷子應(yīng)整齊地放在靠碗右邊的桌上，并應(yīng)等客人們都放下筷子以后，主人示意離席后方可以離開(kāi)，不能自己吃完了放下筷子就走，這樣做是很沒(méi)禮貌的表現(xiàn)。

常用詞語(yǔ)和句子
準(zhǔn)時(shí)：on time/punctually
餐桌禮儀：table manners
合適的、恰當(dāng)?shù)模篴ppropriate
拜訪(fǎng)：

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You are supposed/expected/required to do…
It' s a good idea to…
It' s appropriate/suitable to do …
It' s sensible/reasonable/advisable to do …
It' s good manners to do …
It' s noteworthy that…
I think it would be more helpful if you could do…
It would be wise of you to…
It' s desirable to do …
It' s inappropriate to do …
It' s impolite to do…
It' s unwise/inadvisable to do …

Never （助動(dòng)詞/系動(dòng)詞/情態(tài)動(dòng)詞）主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞…
It' s not suitable for you to do…in such a situation.

 

 

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試題回顧

你受學(xué)生會(huì)委托為校宣傳欄“英語(yǔ)天地”寫(xiě)一則通知，請(qǐng)大家觀(guān)看一部英語(yǔ)短片Growing Together，內(nèi)容包括：
1. 短片內(nèi)容：學(xué)校的發(fā)展；
2. 放映時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)；
3. 歡迎對(duì)短片提出意見(jiàn)。
注意：
1. 詞數(shù)100左右；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

 

寫(xiě)作點(diǎn)撥

英語(yǔ)書(shū)面通知的時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)該以一般將來(lái)時(shí)為主，多使用被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)、簡(jiǎn)單句。在通知中不應(yīng)當(dāng)過(guò)度的使用較復(fù)雜的詞語(yǔ)和讀起來(lái)拗口的句子。

 

第二個(gè)注意點(diǎn)：層次一定要清晰，一個(gè)層次要表達(dá)一件事情，使人看起來(lái)一目了然。

滿(mǎn)分范文

Notice

Boys and girls,
　　May I have your attention, please? Recently, an outstanding movie will be shown in our campus. Welcome to join us end enjoy it! Here are some relevant details about it.
　　To begin with, the name of the movie is Growing together, which is about the development of our beloved school; as a result, it will be not only meaningful but also interesting. Besides, it will be in the library from 2:00 to 4:00 in the afternoon on June 9th . What’s more, everyone of you will be welcome to take part in it, enjoying the movie, having a heated discussion afterwards and giving your own comments.
　　Hopefully, you would make it to our activity. I have the confidence that you will have a great time.

　　The Student Union
　

 

 

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試題回顧

假定你是李華，你的英國(guó)朋友Peter 來(lái)信詢(xún)問(wèn)你校學(xué)生體育運(yùn)動(dòng)情況。請(qǐng)給他回信，內(nèi)容包括：
1. 學(xué)校的體育場(chǎng)館；
2. 主要的運(yùn)動(dòng)項(xiàng)目；
3. 你喜歡的項(xiàng)目。
注意：
1. 詞數(shù)100左右：
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

思路點(diǎn)撥
本題作文為提綱式作文，形式依然是書(shū)信，即給英國(guó)朋友Peter介紹學(xué)校體育運(yùn)動(dòng)情況，屬于學(xué)校生活話(huà)題。這一話(huà)題貼合學(xué)生生活的實(shí)際，學(xué)生并不陌生，有話(huà)可說(shuō)。

首先可以介紹學(xué)校的體育場(chǎng)館，場(chǎng)館的位置，大小，開(kāi)放時(shí)間等等。然后簡(jiǎn)要介紹學(xué)校主要開(kāi)設(shè)的體育項(xiàng)目有哪些，可挑選一到兩個(gè)做詳細(xì)介紹，如學(xué)生的活動(dòng)時(shí)間，活動(dòng)形式，以及此類(lèi)活動(dòng)的好處等。再次簡(jiǎn)要分析自己喜歡的體育項(xiàng)目是什么，并簡(jiǎn)單分析喜歡的原因，自己從中得到的益處等。文章可主要采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，第一人稱(chēng)的方式來(lái)寫(xiě)。

滿(mǎn)分范文
Dear Peter,
　　I am exceedingly delighted to hear from you. You asked me in your last letter about the physical exercise in our school and the following information may give you a rough sketch.
　　To begin with, a fabulous new stadium has been built up, which has become the new landmark in our school. Moreover, with the stadium set up, a wide range of sports events are able to be held, of which ping-pong, football as well as running competitions enjoy great popularity. As for me, I’m intoxicated with basketball since it has been giving me strength to confront the challenges in my life.
　　All in all, I sincerely invite you to come to our school and see for yourself.
　

　Yours,    
　　Li Hua    

 

 

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試題回顧

假定你是李華，你校英語(yǔ)協(xié)會(huì)招聘志愿者，接待來(lái)訪(fǎng)的國(guó)外中學(xué)生。請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)信應(yīng)聘，內(nèi)容包括：
1. 口語(yǔ)能力：
2. 相關(guān)經(jīng)驗(yàn)；
3. 應(yīng)聘目的。
注意：
1. 詞數(shù)80左右；
2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

 

思路點(diǎn)撥
本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文，要求寫(xiě)應(yīng)聘信。
第一步：根據(jù)提示可知，學(xué)校英語(yǔ)協(xié)會(huì)招聘志愿者，接待來(lái)訪(fǎng)的國(guó)外中學(xué)生。要求寫(xiě)封應(yīng)聘信，內(nèi)容包括：1.口語(yǔ)能力：2.相關(guān)經(jīng)驗(yàn)；3.應(yīng)聘目的。
第二步：根據(jù)寫(xiě)作要求確定關(guān)鍵詞（組）。
第三步：根據(jù)提示和關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題。
第四步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接和過(guò)渡，書(shū)寫(xiě)一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀(guān)的卷面是非常重要的。本文內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。另外全文中沒(méi)有中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語(yǔ)的能力。

滿(mǎn)分范文
Dear Sir or Madam,
　　My name is Li Hua. And I am writing to apply for being a volunteer of our school English association.
　　I have a good command of English and have been to the USA twice. So I can communicate well with native speakers of English. What's more, I am kind and friendly to other people. So I can easily get along with foreign students.
　　I' m particularly interested in this job because I want to further improve my oral English capabilities and interpersonal communication skills. Hopefully I can receive your acceptance.

　　Yours faithfully,    
　　Li Hua    

 

 

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試題回顧
讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)：閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。
　　It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.

　　We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afermoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove me up to his farm in Pecos.
　　His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn on my farm," he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
　　In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn't going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don't be late for supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep to the track so that you don't get lost!" “OK!" my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late aftermoon sunmixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven ( 編織的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.

注意：
1. 所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2. 至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線(xiàn)的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；
3. 續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；
4. 續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線(xiàn)標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。

 

思路點(diǎn)撥
讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)要求考生首先要讀懂已有信息，不僅能讀懂字面含義，還要理清文章的脈絡(luò)。續(xù)篇這篇短文時(shí)，考生要搞清楚故事的發(fā)展進(jìn)程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的變化等。在此基礎(chǔ)上，考生要順著文章的思路，根據(jù)線(xiàn)索，發(fā)揮想象，對(duì)其后的情節(jié)進(jìn)行合理預(yù)測(cè)，并用語(yǔ)言表達(dá)出來(lái)。

通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，父親帶兒子去西部荒野的一個(gè)朋友家體驗(yàn)農(nóng)場(chǎng)生活，見(jiàn)父親和叔叔騎馬，兒子也很想騎，于是親身上馬體驗(yàn)。

根據(jù)第一段所給首句Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.這一句是故事發(fā)展的轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)，可從rabbit出現(xiàn)后帶來(lái)的反應(yīng)擴(kuò)展開(kāi)，可以寫(xiě)馬的反應(yīng)，也可以寫(xiě)人的反應(yīng)，但要注意與第二段首句相呼應(yīng)。第二段首句是We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.這一句呼應(yīng)前文Uncle Paul的叮囑——不要誤吃晚飯，可從如何尋路返回農(nóng)場(chǎng)去寫(xiě)。

續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)注意要使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線(xiàn)的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)，我們要熟悉所給劃線(xiàn)詞語(yǔ)，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r(shí)候加以運(yùn)用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后要用下劃線(xiàn)標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。

滿(mǎn)分范文
　　Suddenly a lttle rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. My horse turned to the 1eft to avoid the ittle rabbit as I held on tightly and tried not to fall. Then my dad turned around and shouted, Hoid on! All of a sudden the horse began to run My dad tried to keep up behind us. For a few minutes my horse slowed down to a trot and then stopped beside a river. I looked around and realized that we were way off the track.
　　We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Luckily the stars came out and gave us a little light when we were looking for the way to the farm house. After what must have been several hours, we suddenly heard the sound of sheep in the distance. My dad and I both rode our horses towards the sound of the sheep. As we got closer we saw Uncle Paul with a flashlight waving us over. What a night!

 

 

 

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試題回顧

假設(shè)你是晨光中學(xué)的機(jī)器人興趣小組組長(zhǎng)李津，你的美國(guó)朋友Chris就讀于天津某國(guó)際學(xué)校，他曾在機(jī)器人技能競(jìng)賽中獲獎(jiǎng)。你打算邀請(qǐng)他加入你的團(tuán)隊(duì)，參加即將與7月底在天津舉行的世界青少年機(jī)器人技能競(jìng)賽。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示代表興趣小組給他寫(xiě)一封電子郵件。
（1）比賽的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)；
（2）邀請(qǐng)他的原因；
（3）訓(xùn)練計(jì)劃將發(fā)送其郵箱，請(qǐng)他提出建議。

注意：
（1）詞數(shù)不少于100；
（2）可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實(shí)、行文連貫；
（3）開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：
世界青少年機(jī)器人技能競(jìng)賽 the World Adolescent Robotics Competition

　　Dear Chris,
　　I have good news to tell you.
　　I'm looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours,
　　Li Jin

 

思路點(diǎn)撥
本篇書(shū)面要求寫(xiě)一封邀請(qǐng)信。寫(xiě)作的時(shí)候要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：
一、動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)包括：
1.代表興趣小組發(fā)出邀請(qǐng)；
2. 介紹比賽的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)等安排；
3. 說(shuō)明邀請(qǐng)他的原因，包括Chris曾在機(jī)器人技能競(jìng)賽中獲獎(jiǎng)；
4. 告訴他訓(xùn)練計(jì)劃將發(fā)送其郵箱，請(qǐng)他提出建議。

二、寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，對(duì)于本文來(lái)說(shuō)，以一般將來(lái)時(shí)為主，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)
1. 代表興趣小組發(fā)出邀請(qǐng)；
2. 介紹比賽的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)等安排；
3. 說(shuō)明邀請(qǐng)他的原因，包括Chris 曾在機(jī)器人技能競(jìng)賽中獲獎(jiǎng)；
4. 告訴他訓(xùn)練計(jì)劃將發(fā)送其郵箱，請(qǐng)他提出建議。

滿(mǎn)分范文
　　Dear Chris,
　　I have good news to tell you. The World Adolescent Robotics Competition will be held in Tianjin at the end of July. Hearing that you once took part in a Robotics Skills Competition and won an award, I, on behalf of the Robotics Hobby Group, intend to invite you to join our team in the coming competition. I am sure that your involvement will not only help us in winning the award but also enhance the friendship between our two schools.
　　With this email I also send you our training plan, about which I wish to get your advice because you are more experienced than us. We sincerely hope that we can participate in the competition as team partners.
      I' m looking forward to your reply.
　

　Yours,    

　　Li Jin    

 

 

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試題回顧假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華，你的英國(guó)朋友Jim在給你的郵件中提到他對(duì)中國(guó)文化感興趣，計(jì)劃明年來(lái)北京上大學(xué)。他向你咨詢(xún)相關(guān)信息。請(qǐng)給他回郵件，內(nèi)容包括：

1. 表示歡迎；
2. 推薦他上哪所大學(xué)；
3. 建議他做哪些準(zhǔn)備工作。
注意：

1. 詞數(shù)不少于50；
2. 開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Jim,
　Yours，
　Li Hua

 

思路點(diǎn)撥
本文為提綱式作文，文章要求寫(xiě)推薦信，為英國(guó)朋友介紹北京的大學(xué)。首先可以介紹一下寫(xiě)作背景（Jim對(duì)中國(guó)文化感興趣，要來(lái)中國(guó)學(xué)習(xí)），表達(dá)歡迎。然后推薦一所大學(xué)，并簡(jiǎn)要介紹推薦的原因（如大學(xué)的特色，可以學(xué)到什么等）。再次簡(jiǎn)單介紹應(yīng)該做哪方面的準(zhǔn)備，如可以提前學(xué)習(xí)漢語(yǔ)，讀點(diǎn)有關(guān)中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化的書(shū)，了解中國(guó)的習(xí)俗，讓自己更好地適應(yīng)中國(guó)的生活。文章可采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱(chēng)可以使用第二人稱(chēng)。

滿(mǎn)分范文
　　Dear Jim,
　　I' m so glad to hear your future education plan in Beijing in your last letter. First I would like to express my warmest welcome to you and I am sure you will have the most unforgettable experience during your college in Beijing.
　　Learning your keen interest in Chinese culture, I suggest you apply for Peking University, one of the best universities in China. Its Chinese Literature major is, perfect for you where you. can be completely soaked in Chinese profound history and rich culture. As for preparation some reading in advance in needed like The Story of the Stone while some online courses of spoken Chinese can be helpful for you to adapt into the Chinese language environment.
　　I sincerely hope your dream will come true and it’s my pleasure to show you around in Beijing when that day comes. If you have further questions, please feel free to let me know.

 

　　Yours,    
　　Li Hua    

 

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試題回顧

假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，寫(xiě)一篇英文周記，記述你們上周接待外國(guó)學(xué)生，帶領(lǐng)他們體驗(yàn)中國(guó)茶文化的過(guò)程。
注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。

 

思路點(diǎn)撥
本文為圖片介紹類(lèi)作文，這類(lèi)作文是根據(jù)給出的一幅或幾幅圖畫(huà)所提供的信息寫(xiě)短文。此類(lèi)題的體裁較廣泛，可以是記敘文、說(shuō)明文，也可以是議論文。按照本文的要求可知，是寫(xiě)一篇記敘文。
1. 認(rèn)真讀圖，把握中心。
根據(jù)提示可知，內(nèi)容是帶領(lǐng)外國(guó)學(xué)生體驗(yàn)中國(guó)茶文化的全過(guò)程，介紹了茶具，泡茶，沏茶，品茶的過(guò)程，所以這是這組圖畫(huà)所要表達(dá)的中心。

2.初步構(gòu)思，考慮用詞、短語(yǔ)、句型和時(shí)態(tài)。
在把握了文章的中心后，應(yīng)在內(nèi)心構(gòu)思一個(gè)基本的框架，并考慮使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)和句型，以充分地表達(dá)文章的內(nèi)容。本文是講述上周發(fā)生的事情，故時(shí)態(tài)要以過(guò)去時(shí)為主，人稱(chēng)是第一人稱(chēng)，盡可能地充分利用所學(xué)的短語(yǔ)或句型來(lái)表述具體的內(nèi)容。這是體現(xiàn)自身能力的重要一環(huán)。

3. 連詞成句，然后再連句成文。
運(yùn)用適當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或短語(yǔ)正確表達(dá)各圖的意思。然后再將各圖的單個(gè)句子串連起來(lái)。串連時(shí)，要注意使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞語(yǔ)或過(guò)渡性語(yǔ)句，不至于讓讀者覺(jué)得文章中出現(xiàn)跳躍現(xiàn)象，更使上下文更為緊湊、自然。

4.反復(fù)審核，修改錯(cuò)誤。
一篇文章寫(xiě)好后，應(yīng)進(jìn)行檢查，看短文中是否有錯(cuò)，如拼寫(xiě)、用詞、時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)及表達(dá)方面的錯(cuò)誤。5.宜詳則詳，該略則略。對(duì)于一些細(xì)節(jié)方面的內(nèi)容，如果是文章必不可少的，在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中是不可將其忽略的。如果是可有可無(wú)的細(xì)節(jié)，則可視具體情況進(jìn)行增刪。據(jù)此，我們?cè)谧x圖時(shí)一定要注意閱讀各圖中的一些細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容，看其是否影響文章的內(nèi)容。

滿(mǎn)分范文
　　Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned out be to extremely rewarding.
　　On arriving at the tea house, the foreign students were impressed by the unique tea pots and tea cups. I gave them a vivid and informative introduction of tea culture, including its profound history, its rich variety, and the exquisite craftsmanship of making tea with their interest greatly sparked, I then began to teach them how to make tea.
　　In order to deliver a clear presentation, I slowly explained the traditional procedure of making tea in detail. Absorbed in every move of mine, the foreign students were once again amazed by this unique culture and they couldn’t help taking pictures from time to time.
　　Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves. Washing the tea pots, adding tea leaves, and pouring water into the cups, they followed my instructions and were really immersed in charming tea culture. The tea house witnessed a really enjoyable time for all of us.
　　At the end of the activity, holding the tea bags in our hands, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day. It suddenly hit me that traditional culture like tea culture was of great charm and huge value. And I swelled with pride to spread our own culture to people all over the world.

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】

巧妙使用定語(yǔ)從句，提升了文章檔次：
Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned out be to extremely rewarding.

使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，使句子表達(dá)更簡(jiǎn)潔：
On arriving at the tea house…

I gave them a vivid and informative introduction of tea culture, including its profound history, its rich variety,

Absorbed in every move of mine, the foreign students were once again amazed by this unique culture

holding the tea bags in our hands, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day.

使用倒裝句突出重點(diǎn)。
Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves.

使用it做形式主語(yǔ)，使表達(dá)更地道。
It suddenly hit me that traditional culture like tea culture was of great charm and huge value.

 

 

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試題回顧

請(qǐng)閱讀下面文字，并按照要求用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇150詞左右的文章。

 

寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容：

1.用約30個(gè)詞概括上述利用排名( ratings)進(jìn)行消費(fèi)的現(xiàn)象；
2.談?wù)勀闳绾慰创M(fèi)排名，然后用2-3個(gè)理由或論據(jù)支撐你的看法。
寫(xiě)作要求：
1.寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中不能直接引用原文語(yǔ)句；
2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)；
3.不必寫(xiě)標(biāo)題
評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：
內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

 

思路點(diǎn)撥
先用30詞概括閱讀材料，然后針對(duì)材料中的話(huà)題寫(xiě)一篇議論文談看法。首先要認(rèn)真閱讀兩段有關(guān)消費(fèi)排名現(xiàn)象及觀(guān)點(diǎn)的純文字材料，然后進(jìn)行比較和分析，表明態(tài)度，作出價(jià)值判斷。

文章首段要簡(jiǎn)要介紹兩段材料，第一段材料為一對(duì)母子買(mǎi)旅行箱看了網(wǎng)上的評(píng)論，結(jié)果買(mǎi)回來(lái)的旅行箱質(zhì)量很好。第二段材料為一幫人去餐館吃飯，看了on-line rating，結(jié)果飯菜很不好吃，從而凸顯出online rating的不靠譜。

然后寫(xiě)你對(duì)online rating的看法，表明觀(guān)點(diǎn)，注意用2-3個(gè)論據(jù)來(lái)支撐自己的看法。

文章屬于議論文，要注意主題句的使用，論點(diǎn)之間要注意有條理。文章可主要采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，第三人稱(chēng)來(lái)寫(xiě)。

滿(mǎn)分范文
　　Possible version one:
　　As a major channel of consumption information, the rating is an efficient source of information for shopping in our own consumption. Interestingly, the same rating may have different influences on different consumers.
　　There is no doubt that it is unwise to depend completely on the ratings in consumption. The advantages and disadvantages of ratings are often closely related. It is necessary to hold an objective attitude towards ratings.
　　Possible version two:
　　Nowadays, most commodities or services are rated through certain channels. These ratings, easy to access, are playing an increasingly important role in customers' purchase decision. However, results are sometimes unsatisfactory.
　　There is no denying that such ratings might bring convenience to consumers, but they are often misleading and unreliable. As we all know, most of the ratings are based on others’ judgment on the product or service concerned. Every judgment comes from a specific need or a unique psychological state. Apparently, blindly following others' advice will affect our own judgment. Another fact should not be neglected that some of the ratings are the outcome of a careful manipulation of companies or sellers. It has become a common practice for some to pay
      for good ratings on their products or services so as to increase their sales.

　　Therefore, we should give a second thought to these ratings whenever we go shopping.